Friday, August 1, 2008

Bartered for bliss

When grief returned
and reclaimed the nest,
i told her it was 'bartered
for bliss' to someone who
uses a 'nest cradle for rest'
MIP

21 comments:

Mampi said...

Hope 'someone' values it enough.

Vinay said...

beautiful verse...just like ur mind...!

RiverSoul said...

Correct me if i am wrong,
Is this grief to the mother?
Someone who was used as a cradle to rest by a child?
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Miladysa said...

"bartered for bliss"

I love that phrase!

Priya said...

U carved it so well.

deepsat said...

indeed barter for bliss!! absolutely marvelous!

flyingstars said...

lovely words...short yet has so much depth & feelings in them.

Usha Pisharody said...

Rough times when bliss is bartered [I love the expression there!]; there is a deep poignancy about this write, that haunts.

Well written!

Lakshmi said...

lovely verse...liked the imagery

MAN IN PAINTING said...

"Grief, like an evening bird returns to reclaim her nest but flew back because it was bartered for bliss to a young angel who can remould anything(even a grief nest to a joy cradle)"
i coudn't convey the bliss..
may b i will rewrite it...
MIP

Rushabhh Gandhi said...

Superb! i liked it...and liked it even more after reading the above post of yours....

Roopa said...

Don't you dare to rewrite it MIP. It is beautiful as is. When there is your baby in your heart, there is indeed no place in it for grief. And never barter that bliss!

MAN IN PAINTING said...

@rushabh
Thank you
@roopa
Thanks a lot..
feel releived..
i thought it was short circuited.. and the key lied in the 'heart'

nikkita said...

keyboard sculpteror ..indeed!!

blogrollin u..

cheerz!

the girl with a zillion namesakes said...

:) i have nothing else to say

polona said...

this is profound... and there's nothing wrong if it can be interpreted in diffeent ways...

MAN IN PAINTING said...

@nikita
thank you
@girl with a million name..
Thank you..
@polona
sure..
potentials..
thank you..

asuph said...

mip,

of course you conveyed it. and my philosophy is: never explain a poem. it will destroy those hundred interpretations which make poetry such a fun (to write).

really loved this one.

cheers,
asuph

PS: as for waiting for my next post, you could as well wait for godot more successfully. i'm hit by the biggest writing block of my writing non-career.

Priya said...

I like these not a poems that you have been writing recently,they are so simple and yet so complicated!

MAN IN PAINTING said...

@asuph
true..
but nowadays, i am not much serious about order,words,arrangements..but more interested in the sketches behind them..there i see chromosomes of everything..of passion,love,hate,catastrophies..
all starts from the 'connection' of wrong wires..
about writing block
my job too is not at all related to writing..
don't force yourself..
they will come to you..
wishes..
take care..

MAN IN PAINTING said...

@priya
they are simple and simple!
lol
thank you