Tuesday, December 9, 2008

Lives of Synonyms

Like  blunt edges  of surgeon's knives
during siesta hours of eventful days
with expressions neither wry nor cry
synonyms live their seasonal lives.

49 comments:

Winnie the poohi said...

hey this is wonderful!

Rakesh Vanamali said...

Meaning the same as the other, their lives are a duplicate and hence unimportantly insignificant!

MIP, very well contructed, as always!

Cheers

Rakesh

Priya said...

How truly you captivated the moments of unknown lives who live like a dead soul.

deepsat said...

the cuckoo flew over the nest, i didnt catch it!!!

;-))

man in painting said...

@Winnie
thank you...

man in painting said...

@Rakesh
i have changed it again..because at least in this post, synonyms should get their space..
let more synonyms come and go..
thank you..

man in painting said...

@priya
liked the way you read it..
thank you so much..

man in painting said...

@satish
lol!
i changed it a little.
now try..

Roopa said...

To admit, I am totally stumped. I could read oxymorons in the first two lines - surgeons' "blunt" knives and "siesta" during eventful days - in fact, reading the first two lines, I thought the poem should be titled "Lives of Paradoxes" or "Lives of Oxymorons." I can understand how you compare synonyms to blunt knives, very apt indeed, but "blunt edges" of knives don't live and die, and that is the connotation I could read from it. I told you, I am kinda stupid. Also, my pedantic mind doesn't allow "cry" to be an adjective :).

Stop confusing poor souls like me, MIP ;)

Keshi said...

d u mean synonyms live a 2nd-hand life..a life thats dull even amidst the most exciting day?

Keshi.

man in painting said...

lol
yes it is absurd..without rules..and it was intended..that was why I was seeking your help..It just simply refuses to get tamed..
"with expressions neither smile nor cry" was the earlier one..but when i tried to read it separetely "wry expressions" and "expressions that could cry"( yes used as a verb)..i wanted to know (though it is improper)what feeling we will get when changing "lanes"while rollerskating..
and about "surgeon's knives" and living and dying..you are absolutely right. I feel now that it convey the wrong feeling.
but how will I correct it?
i have a change..
please read

aria said...

sometimes they are set against each other in the most convincing ways like antos..

RiverSoul said...

Hey MiP,
Forgive my absence, coz my Blogroll gave up on me.
:(
Nice notapoem though.
:)
Mirrors my thoughts
:)

man in painting said...

@aria..
true..
that is another dimension..
But where are you..?

man in painting said...

@river soul...
thank you so much..
happy you liked it..

chitra said...

kuch nahin samaj aaya.

My english understanding is poor, I guess.

Shruti said...

seasonal lives...so true..
made me introspect deep...
amazing

gypsy said...

gud one...

broca's area said...

nice:)

broca's area said...

blogrolled u:)

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

wowwww...brilliant. i loved the similarities u hv drawn. :)

Tara said...

Lovely words again MIP! The anonymity of their lives was beautifully captured. :)

Roopa said...

wow this is much clearer. "seasonal lives" definitely brings out the transience and relative insignificance of synonyms. and it doesn't clash with surgeons' knives either :)

Devika Jyothi said...

Hi MIP!

A new one..but theme is same -- twins, synonyms...their lives remain similar :)

Fire the neurons, smoke your brain, dear..and churn out a good one..

wishes,
devika

smiles and chrysathemums to Baby B..now its full of them :)

man in painting said...

@chithra
its ok..
thank you...

man in painting said...

@shruthi
thank you..

man in painting said...

@gypsy
thank you..

man in painting said...

@broca
thank you...
exams over?

man in painting said...

@tara
you got it right tara
thank you..

man in painting said...

@Roopa..
full credit to YOU...
thanks a lot..
Most of the time I am like'pig in the city'...
take care..
mip

man in painting said...

@Devika...
may be next time..
thanks for the chrysanthemum..
take care
wishes..

Unknown said...

hnnmm interesting one..

but wondering what lead u to these thoughts.. because it is quite a random thought.. :)

Femin Susan said...

Hello……
This is amazing!! I am so glad to found your blog!
You are welcomed to my blog…….

Casperbaba said...

sir,
i simply bow down to your metaphoric brilliance. :)
such a concrete thought amist such tender words.

its a pleasure indeed! :)

man in painting said...

@ani
:)
Synonyms...
I am just wondering about them..
between synonyms there is space..
and through that space we can peep to the world of "nothings"
in those rare moments there is freedom...

man in painting said...

@femin susan
thank you...
will visit soon..

man in painting said...

@dearest Casper...
where were you?
soo happy you are back..
we all missed you..
thank you for the nice words..
mip

The Seeker said...

Have always wondered about synonyms of lives,, well this is something insightful

man in painting said...

@seeker
thank you...

Devika Jyothi said...

came for a new one MIP..
Hope its not about antonyms next time ;))

wishes,
devika

How do we know said...

wonderful! All ur recent posts are wonderful, and i have missed a lot.

Old Monk said...

Thank you for the clarification.Must admit that it is a brain cracking one.

man in painting said...

@devika...
:)

man in painting said...

@how do we know
thank you...
you can read it anytime..
take care
wishes..

man in painting said...

@old monk..
lol
thank you..

broca's area said...

[read my post on blog anniversary and be a part of it:)]

man in painting said...

@broca
congrats...
coming to your blog

Heart'n'Soul said...

WOW

wat do u eat/drink man!!!

where do u get all these ideas for one, and the words for two???

loved it as usual :)

man in painting said...

@heart'n soul
great compliment!
thank you..