To admit, I am totally stumped. I could read oxymorons in the first two lines - surgeons' "blunt" knives and "siesta" during eventful days - in fact, reading the first two lines, I thought the poem should be titled "Lives of Paradoxes" or "Lives of Oxymorons." I can understand how you compare synonyms to blunt knives, very apt indeed, but "blunt edges" of knives don't live and die, and that is the connotation I could read from it. I told you, I am kinda stupid. Also, my pedantic mind doesn't allow "cry" to be an adjective :).
lol yes it is absurd..without rules..and it was intended..that was why I was seeking your help..It just simply refuses to get tamed.. "with expressions neither smile nor cry" was the earlier one..but when i tried to read it separetely "wry expressions" and "expressions that could cry"( yes used as a verb)..i wanted to know (though it is improper)what feeling we will get when changing "lanes"while rollerskating.. and about "surgeon's knives" and living and dying..you are absolutely right. I feel now that it convey the wrong feeling. but how will I correct it? i have a change.. please read
wow this is much clearer. "seasonal lives" definitely brings out the transience and relative insignificance of synonyms. and it doesn't clash with surgeons' knives either :)
@ani :) Synonyms... I am just wondering about them.. between synonyms there is space.. and through that space we can peep to the world of "nothings" in those rare moments there is freedom...
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hey this is wonderful!
Meaning the same as the other, their lives are a duplicate and hence unimportantly insignificant!
MIP, very well contructed, as always!
Cheers
Rakesh
How truly you captivated the moments of unknown lives who live like a dead soul.
the cuckoo flew over the nest, i didnt catch it!!!
;-))
@Winnie
thank you...
@Rakesh
i have changed it again..because at least in this post, synonyms should get their space..
let more synonyms come and go..
thank you..
@priya
liked the way you read it..
thank you so much..
@satish
lol!
i changed it a little.
now try..
To admit, I am totally stumped. I could read oxymorons in the first two lines - surgeons' "blunt" knives and "siesta" during eventful days - in fact, reading the first two lines, I thought the poem should be titled "Lives of Paradoxes" or "Lives of Oxymorons." I can understand how you compare synonyms to blunt knives, very apt indeed, but "blunt edges" of knives don't live and die, and that is the connotation I could read from it. I told you, I am kinda stupid. Also, my pedantic mind doesn't allow "cry" to be an adjective :).
Stop confusing poor souls like me, MIP ;)
d u mean synonyms live a 2nd-hand life..a life thats dull even amidst the most exciting day?
Keshi.
lol
yes it is absurd..without rules..and it was intended..that was why I was seeking your help..It just simply refuses to get tamed..
"with expressions neither smile nor cry" was the earlier one..but when i tried to read it separetely "wry expressions" and "expressions that could cry"( yes used as a verb)..i wanted to know (though it is improper)what feeling we will get when changing "lanes"while rollerskating..
and about "surgeon's knives" and living and dying..you are absolutely right. I feel now that it convey the wrong feeling.
but how will I correct it?
i have a change..
please read
sometimes they are set against each other in the most convincing ways like antos..
Hey MiP,
Forgive my absence, coz my Blogroll gave up on me.
:(
Nice notapoem though.
:)
Mirrors my thoughts
:)
@aria..
true..
that is another dimension..
But where are you..?
@river soul...
thank you so much..
happy you liked it..
kuch nahin samaj aaya.
My english understanding is poor, I guess.
seasonal lives...so true..
made me introspect deep...
amazing
gud one...
nice:)
blogrolled u:)
wowwww...brilliant. i loved the similarities u hv drawn. :)
Lovely words again MIP! The anonymity of their lives was beautifully captured. :)
wow this is much clearer. "seasonal lives" definitely brings out the transience and relative insignificance of synonyms. and it doesn't clash with surgeons' knives either :)
Hi MIP!
A new one..but theme is same -- twins, synonyms...their lives remain similar :)
Fire the neurons, smoke your brain, dear..and churn out a good one..
wishes,
devika
smiles and chrysathemums to Baby B..now its full of them :)
@chithra
its ok..
thank you...
@shruthi
thank you..
@gypsy
thank you..
@broca
thank you...
exams over?
@tara
you got it right tara
thank you..
@Roopa..
full credit to YOU...
thanks a lot..
Most of the time I am like'pig in the city'...
take care..
mip
@Devika...
may be next time..
thanks for the chrysanthemum..
take care
wishes..
hnnmm interesting one..
but wondering what lead u to these thoughts.. because it is quite a random thought.. :)
Hello……
This is amazing!! I am so glad to found your blog!
You are welcomed to my blog…….
sir,
i simply bow down to your metaphoric brilliance. :)
such a concrete thought amist such tender words.
its a pleasure indeed! :)
@ani
:)
Synonyms...
I am just wondering about them..
between synonyms there is space..
and through that space we can peep to the world of "nothings"
in those rare moments there is freedom...
@femin susan
thank you...
will visit soon..
@dearest Casper...
where were you?
soo happy you are back..
we all missed you..
thank you for the nice words..
mip
Have always wondered about synonyms of lives,, well this is something insightful
@seeker
thank you...
came for a new one MIP..
Hope its not about antonyms next time ;))
wishes,
devika
wonderful! All ur recent posts are wonderful, and i have missed a lot.
Thank you for the clarification.Must admit that it is a brain cracking one.
@devika...
:)
@how do we know
thank you...
you can read it anytime..
take care
wishes..
@old monk..
lol
thank you..
[read my post on blog anniversary and be a part of it:)]
@broca
congrats...
coming to your blog
WOW
wat do u eat/drink man!!!
where do u get all these ideas for one, and the words for two???
loved it as usual :)
@heart'n soul
great compliment!
thank you..
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