Thursday, May 15, 2008

WRITINGS ON AN ABANDONED WALL-"Hide and Seek"




It is something
that i should never tell you,
even my last breath
hangs from the blade of life.

I knew it
during our morning walks
on a road
carpetted with nebulas of bird shit.


In and out
a bamboo stem
we dip and float
with butterflystrokes
splitting time and making tones
never ending
our hide and seek.

9 comments:

i'm_alive said...

Really nice piece. Your writings reflect that you observe and feel, and that you're a philosophical person...probably you live in a surreal world or you like surrealism..

Interesting way of expressing and writing.

Keep writing :)
Thanx a lot for commenting on my blog! :D

dr knowlittle said...

Good writing.Something like Zen.deeply philosophical.keep on writing.

shex said...

"carpetted with nebulas of bird shit"

loved the line and the theme

Shruti said...

you have a unique creativity in you which is very strongly evident in your writings!

i was carried away by this piece of your strange yet so effective creativity..

Congratulations..and happy writing!
:)

Priya said...

Beautiful...

On my blogroll...

manorath said...

hey i love each every post of urs.. they are brilliant.. and topped with ur crativity.. and frm a philosopher like u..

each and every line of this poem is brilliant.. there is a unique experience i felt whn i read this poem..

MAN IN PAINTING said...

@i'm alive
You really named it.
Thanx.

Usha Pisharody said...

Its this unnerving feeling of you seeing every little thing so well, that it seems unreal...

nebulae of bird droppings?? What a piece of imagery! Perfect!

MAN IN PAINTING said...

@usha..
Thank you